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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: ‘Everyday’ is an adjective. Did you mean ‘every day’?
Suggestion: every day
. 28% of weekly rate. On the other hand, everyday and never eaters rate remained the lowe.
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 822.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59217877095 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42039388215 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597765363128 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 250.2 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6553278993 43.030603864 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.75 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 22.9334400587 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.23603664747 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249936509806 0.215688989381 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100296986582 0.103423049105 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0905429732958 0.0843802449381 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165242955988 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0734540622134 0.0819641961636 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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September 13, 2018

IELTS Writing Task 1: ‘fast food’ answer

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

(Source: Cambridge IELTS 12)

Here’s my full sample answer. Fill the gaps to complete it.

The bar chart illustrates the frequency with ______ Americans ate in fast food establishments from 2003 to 2013.

It is clear that the majority of Americans ate in fast food restaurants between once a week and once a month in all three years. We can also see a shift ______ eating in these restaurants less frequently by the end of the 10-year period.

In each of the years shown on the chart, ______ to 60% of people in the US ate in fast food restaurants between once and four times a month. Roughly 15 to 20% of Americans ______ eating in fast food outlets several times per week, while 3 to 4% of people ate in these outlets daily. At the other ______ of the scale, around 4% of people avoided fast food restaurants completely.

Between 2006 and 2013, the total proportion of Americans who ate in fast food establishments either once a week or several times a week ______ by almost 10%. At the same time, there was an ______ of around 8% in the ‘once or twice a month’ category. In other words, the weekly fast food habit that was ______ in 2003 and 2006 became a monthly or twice monthly habit in 2013.

Use the following words:
end, close, increase, which, reported, common, towards, fell

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1.which
2.towards
3.close
4.common
5.end
6.fell
7.increase
8.reported

which towards close reported end fell increase common

1. which
2. towards
3. close
4. reported
5. end
6. fell
7. increase
8. common

If you add together the middle two columns, you get close to 60%.

«between one and four times a month» seems more common.

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towards
close
reported
end
fell
increase
common

1. which
2. reported
3. close
4. towards
5. end
6. increase
7. fell
8. common

reported
end
close
which
toward
fell
increase
common

1. which
2. towards
3. close
4. reported
5. end
6. fell
7. increase
8. common

Ask for help.
It seems that Simon left «A few times a year» category out?

First, here are the answers:

1. which
2. towards
3. close
4. reported
5. end
6. fell
7. increase
8. common

Thanks for your positive comment about the quality of my lessons!

My reason for choosing to add the two middle columns was that I wanted to give a figure that supported the statement I had made in the first sentence of my overview (the majority. between once a week and once a month).

Yes, I’m sure it’s more common to write «between one and four times». I almost wrote this myself, and it’s probably what I would say and write normally.

However, both ways are fine, and I chose «once» because I thought it would help me to avoid any grammar questions. I imagined that someone would ask me why I put «one» and «times» (singular and plural) together.

As «once» means «one time», I’m really saying «between one time and four times» (i.e. I’m separating singular and plural). «Between one and four times» is common because it seems to flow better, but I suppose it does contain a little imperfection from a grammar perspective.

Yes, I did miss that category out. I just didn’t have time to include it, and I don’t think it contains any key information.

common
end
towards
which
reported
fell
increase
close

Hi,Simon. I’m confused for a long time. Generally speaking, is there any information we can’t leave out? And what kind of information can we decide whether or not to write about by ourselves?
THANKS

which
towards
close
common
end
fell
increase
reported

The implication is that details must be accurate, and should support the key features outlined in the overview, as a minimum. There is no specific requirement to mention every single figure. On some charts there is so much information that the only way is to group detail together.

As a rule of thumb, try to mention each category once, but do not overrun twenty minutes as Task 2 counts for twice the marks.

1. which
2. towards
3. close
4. reported
5. end
6. fell
7. increase
8. common

the chart below shows how frequently people in USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

the chart below shows how frequently people in USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, while, in addition, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 908.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 199.0 196.424390244 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.56281407035 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4899799196 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 109.0 106.607317073 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547738693467 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 269.1 283.868780488 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 22.4926829268 173% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 181.324681166 43.030603864 421% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 181.6 112.824112599 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.8 22.9334400587 174% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.2 5.23603664747 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 1.69756097561 766% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288378664446 0.215688989381 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165950498109 0.103423049105 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491504214182 0.0843802449381 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19142463061 0.15604864568 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0118447884349 0.0819641961636 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 13.2329268293 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.81 61.2550243902 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.1 10.3012195122 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 40.7170731707 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 10.9970731707 160% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the frequency of American people went to fast food restaurants in 2003, 2006, and 2013. Overall, a considerable amount of the USA residents ate fast food once a week in 2003 and 2006, while more people went to fast food restaurants one or two times every month in 2013.

First of all, in 2003, 4% of the individuals ate fast food every day. This ratio jumped to its four times at 16% in the next group and then peaking at 30%. After experiencing a gradual decrease, the figure dramatically fell to the final statistic of 5% in those never eating fast food. Similarly, this trend also can be viewed in 2006 but in a more significant way. The percentage firstly started at 3% before soaring to 20% in the next group. After levelling off at 32%, it steadily dropped to 4% in the end.

As for the year of 2013, a same initial proportion was recorded as that in 2006. Therefore, it sustainably climbed to the highest point at 32% in the group of eating junk food once or twice a month. The last two groups also shared the same rates with that in 2006, constituting 15% and 4% respectively.

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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, as for, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 911.0 965.302439024 94% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.46568627451 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57645025658 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 265.5 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5431690411 43.030603864 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8181818182 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5454545455 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.18181818182 5.23603664747 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183940605076 0.215688989381 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708329790009 0.103423049105 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947461487863 0.0843802449381 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132473458257 0.15604864568 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.115380726956 0.0819641961636 141% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Essay evaluation report

flaws:
1. It is not clear to say ‘in the next group’ or ‘The last two groups’. need to make them clear.

2. the summary is not only for the peak ones, it is for overall, better like this:

Overall, throughout the surveyed period, most Americans ate fast food moderately, while the percentage of people never ate or ate on daily basis remained low.

3. for this topic, better to compare by categories, not by years. when it is by years, it is hard to figure out what is the ‘main features’. but by category, it is easier to figure out:

‘every day’ and ‘never’ share the same pattern.

‘once a week’ and ‘several times a week’ share the same pattern.

in 2013, people eat less fast food, the top one is ‘once or twice a month’,

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 10
No. of Words: 204 200
No. of Characters: 871 1000
No. of Different Words: 115 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.779 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.27 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 44 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 33 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 19 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.63 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.375 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4

IELTS Writing Task 1 – Eating fast food at restaurant in USA

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

(203 Words, 9 Sentences, 4 Paragraphs, Band 9)

The bar chart illustrates the frequency with which Americans ate in fast food establishments from 2003 to 2013.

It is clear that the majority of Americans ate in fast food restaurants between once a week and once a month in all three years. We can also see a shift towards eating in these restaurants less frequently by the end of the 10-year period.

In each of the years shown on the chart, close to 60% of people in the US ate in fast food restaurants between once and four times a month. Roughly 15 to 20% of Americans reported eating in fast food outlets several times per week, while 3 to 4% of people ate in these outlets daily. At the other end of the scale, around 4% of people avoided fast food restaurants completely.

Between 2006 and 2013, the total proportion of Americans who ate in fast food establishments either once a week or several times a week fell by almost 10%. At the same time, there was an increase of around 8% in the ‘once or twice a month’ category. In other words, the weekly fast food habit that was common in 2003 and 2006 became a monthly or twice monthly habit in 2013.

(Source: Cambridge IELTS 12, NB: Follow the above writing structure for getting higher IELTS band score in the examination. This sample answer can be an example of good writing out of many possible approaches.)

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