The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture illustrates the linear process of making honey. Overall, there are seven main stages of producing honey which begins with the hive construction and ends when the honey is ready to be collected and used.

First of all, honey bees build their own hive that they can use in order to contain honey. Each cell is made in hexagon shape. After that, they leave the container and fly to the garden where many flowers are blooming so that they can collect the nectar as can be seen in the third stage. In this stage, each bee uses their legs to gather the nectar from the flowers then bring it back to their hive.

Turn to next stage, the condensation occurs. A group of honey bees fan their wings to cool down the honey. Finally, the bee moves the bile on the top of a hole to another that makes the water evaporate quicker and the process is complete.

Comments

Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, so, then, third, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe ‘which’ is over used).
Pronoun: 13.0 5.60731707317 232% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 22.0 33.7804878049 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 706.0 965.302439024 73% => OK
No of words: 159.0 196.424390244 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.44025157233 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55098862472 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.05178016061 2.65546596893 77% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622641509434 0.547539520022 114% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.7933526814 43.030603864 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.4444444444 112.824112599 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178674193945 0.215688989381 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765670795838 0.103423049105 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629274789124 0.0843802449381 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132762307916 0.15604864568 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052078071948 0.0819641961636 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.36 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 40.7170731707 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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the diagrams show how the bee makes honey and the stages in the production of honey summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features

the diagrams show how the bee makes honey, and the stages in the production of honey. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The pictures show the steps involved in the life-cycle of the bee and the process by which honey is produced.
Overall, it is noticed that there are 6 stages of making honey, from laying eggs in honeycomb to leaving nectar in a hive in order to become a honey. After that, production of honey experience 5 steps, starting with collecting honeycomb and finishing with distributing and selling.
In terms of making honey, the first step is that a queen bee lays eggs in honeycomb, which is prepared beforehand. These eggs develop to become larvas. And until a week later, they get completely developed. The larvas need three more weeks to turn into bees to be able to leave the hive. Following this, the bees are mature enough to be capable of gathering nectar from flower and subsequently stimulating the nectar in hives, which is called honey, that are continuously produced to become commercial products.
If we look at the process of producing honey. First of all, beekeepers remove the honeycomb from the hives. After being extracted the honeycomb by using a machine, honey is then boiled and cleaned. The last step is that the honey is poured into bottles so that they are delivered to bring to customers.

Comments

Essay evaluations by e-grader

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
. produced to become commercial products. If we look at the process of producing hon.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, so, then, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe ‘which’ is over used).
Pronoun: 12.0 5.60731707317 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1005.0 965.302439024 104% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83173076923 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61552159568 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 118.0 106.607317073 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567307692308 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 312.3 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 50.0507381453 43.030603864 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.75 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3333333333 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.23603664747 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241725954316 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873579175585 0.103423049105 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682446862502 0.0843802449381 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161189819472 0.15604864568 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368724471883 0.0819641961636 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 11.4140731707 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows information about the process of producing honey by bees. There are seven stages in order to get honey from bees. At first, the bees must first build a hive and find the nectar inside the flower. Then once it is accomplished, they are able to collect the honey bees.

In the beginning, the bees should build a hive which consists of many cells. Next, they will leave their hive to look for flowers. Once the bees find a flower with the nectar inside, they collected and used the nectar for making honey.

In the following stage, the bees must bring the nectar to their hive and the production process can start. First, the bees may put it to the hive and cooled with their wings in order to fulling the cells. Because of that, the nectar loses its water content and as a result, the honey is eventually made.

Comments

Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, look, may, then, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 1.00243902439 599% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 683.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 152.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49342105263 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51124308557 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.07935330814 2.65546596893 78% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539473684211 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 200.7 283.868780488 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 18.2715626042 43.030603864 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.3 112.824112599 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2 22.9334400587 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.23603664747 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137991870135 0.215688989381 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618114112532 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580648343349 0.0843802449381 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986744424699 0.15604864568 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0371258941314 0.0819641961636 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 13.2329268293 55% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 81.63 61.2550243902 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.17 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.77 8.06136585366 84% => OK
difficult_words: 23.0 40.7170731707 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 11.4329268293 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 11.0658536585 54% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

MODEL ANSWER>>>

A clear cut illustration on the way which honey is produced by bees is sequenced in the given chart.

It is clear that the process involves seven steps, starting from making the hive to the extraction and use of honey for human consumption.

In the first stage, bees in group, start making the hive or honey comb, with several hexagonal-shaped cells. Once the work of these closely connected cells is nearly completed, they move out in search of flowers to collect nectar to fill the hives. Bees specialized in nectar collection, land on the top of the bloomed flowers and deposit it in the hives. The collection occurs multiple times a day.

In the fifth step, as most cells are filled with nectar, bees fan the cells to assist the evaporation of excess water content from there. The final stage involves the careful extraction of honey from the honey combs for human use.